The bar charts below show the Marriage and Divorce Statstistics for nine countries in 1981 and 1994

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the rate of marriages and

divorce

occuring

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occurring

in nine countries per thousand people over 13

years

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According

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, to the marriage statistics the year 1981, witnessed more number of weddings except in

Denmark

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, the

divorce

statistics

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that the

sepration

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separation

rate is

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higher

in the year 1994 but not in

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States and

Denmark

. The Unions in

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in both

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years

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other country. The rest of the countries except

Denmark

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trend, i.e. , they all are near an average value of six.

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and Britian

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Britian

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Britain

saw the highest unions in 1981 and

Denmark

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, in 1994

Denmark

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second

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last

. Now, the

Divorce

statistics, the Americans have topped in both

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years

and Italians are at the bottom.

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Denish

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population had more

seprations

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separations

in 1981 and other countries had less in comparison to 1994. Germans have

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number of

divorce

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divorces

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i.e 2 over thousand in both

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years

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The bar charts below show the Marriage and Divorce Statstistics for nine countries in 1981 and 1994

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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