The bar charts below show the Marriage and Divorce Statstistics for nine countries in 1981 and 1994

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the rate of marriages and

divorce

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occuring

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occurring

in nine countries per thousand people over 13

years

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, to the marriage statistics the year 1981, witnessed more number of weddings except in

Denmark

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, the

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statistics

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that the

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rate is

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higher

in the year 1994 but not in

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States and

Denmark

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. The Unions in

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years

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other country. The rest of the countries except

Denmark

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trend, i.e. , they all are near an average value of six.

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and Britian

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Britian

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Britain

saw the highest unions in 1981 and

Denmark

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, in 1994

Denmark

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had weddings

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place and France in

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. Now, the

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statistics, the Americans have topped in both

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years

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and Italians are at the bottom.

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Denish

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Danish

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population had more

seprations

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separations

in 1981 and other countries had less in comparison to 1994. Germans have

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number of

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divorce

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divorces

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i.e 2 over thousand in both

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years

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The bar charts below show the Marriage and Divorce Statstistics for nine countries in 1981 and 1994

10.Some people think that language school be taught in small classes, while other people think the number of students in a language class does not matter. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With growing populations in cities, more and more people live in homes with little or no outdoor space. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Full- time students should not spend a lot of time on studying, but the should be involved in other activities too. To what extend do you agree or disagree?