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You live In a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. in the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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I am writing to ask if I could please be given another
room
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 in college. At
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 I share a
room
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 with another student who unfortunately is very noisy
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 makes it very difficult for me to study I have asked
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 student on many occasions to let me work quietly but there has been no change He plays his radio or watches TV constantly and often invites friends round for parties which
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 till late in the night. I have tried working in the library but it is not open at all the times I need
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 very worried about
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 situation, as I have to finish my final year project
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 term and have my final exams coming up at the end of the year. I would be most grateful if you could please give me a
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 by myself or a
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 sharing with a student who is quiet. I look forward to hearing from you and thank you in advance for your help. Yours faithfully Jan Hutt

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation officer
  • roommate
  • share a room
  • living arrangement
  • difficult to work
  • noise levels
  • study environment
  • privacy concerns
  • alternative accommodation
  • single room
  • academic performance
  • well-being
  • respectfully request
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