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Some high schools require all students to wear school uniforms. Other high schools permit students to decide what to wear to school. Which of these two school policies do you think is better?

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It is common to see that some high
school
 students are required to wear
school
 uniforms. But some high schools allow the students to dress in their own way. I personally believe that wearing uniforms is a proper policy for
serveral
(used with count nouns) of an indefinite number more than 2 or 3 but not many
several
 reasons. Wearing uniforms could reduce
school
 bullying.
School
 bullying has been a long discussed subject, and one of the many events that could trigger a tragedy of bully is the dress. Some students are
laughed
Suggestion
laughing
 at their clothing because it looks cheap, while other teenagers are envied by their peers
simple
Suggestion
simply
 because their dressing is eye-catching. Considering the
abovementioned
Suggestion
above mentioned
 problem, the uniform, as a useful tool to hide the differences in students' economic conditions, and personal preferences, could reduce the likelihood of
school
 bullying caused by dresses.
In addition
, wearing uniforms is a proper strategy to teach the teenagers the meaning of disciplined. Entering high
school
, the children are coming to the phase where they should be able to understand that following the rules in the society is something important throughout their lives. Compared with showing their unique personalities, being able to obey is the basic skill if a student wants to cope with the future challenges in their work.
Therefore
, following the high
school
 dressing code is a good starting point.
Undoubtly
Suggestion
Undoubtedly
, wearing their own clothes is good for cultivating students'
independency
freedom from control or influence of another or others
independence
 and unique character. Yet,
this
 can
also
 be done
at
Suggestion
in
 their leisure time, at home or on holidays. It is not necessary to show
this
 in the form of a piece of clothing. In conclusion, I personally believe that the policy that
requies
require as useful, just, or proper
requires
 everyone to wear a uniform is better for the students, as well as the
school
 environment.

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