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Some companies have uniforms for their staff which must be worn at all times. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion.

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People working in some departments have to wear uniforms all the times
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 In my opinion,
this
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 strategy has many advantages while few consider it
be
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to be
 disadvantageous. There are many advantages of putting on
uniform
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 at work place
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Firstly
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 Certain departments have a
uniform
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 which is their
pecularity
the quality of being widely admired or accepted or sought after
popularity
peculiarity
 and
general public
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the general public
 will have no difficulty in finding them. For
isntance
an occurrence of something
instance
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 policemen have to wear
uniform
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 and wear a badge so that they can easily be identified from a distance, so any person worried or in
state
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a state
the state
 of shock
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 of trauma or burglary can recognise them easily to seek assistance
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Secondly
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it becomes
easier for person
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easier for a person
 in the company to go to job daily in a neat and well pressed
dress
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. They do not have to search for
dress
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 daily as to what to wear
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For instance
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ladies are very particular about their
dress
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 design and brands so it will cost them much cheaper.
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on
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On
 the other hand
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few people are strongly against the
uniform
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 in workplaces as they think it becomes a compulsion for those not affording to purchase the
dress
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The employees have to spend a portion of their salary in purchasing
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uniform
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uniforms
, so a little amount will be left for themselves as well as family in low income group. In conclusion
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,
 wearing
uniform
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 in a company has a lot of
benefits but
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benefits, but
 there are few disadvantages which can be reduced if the companies take personal interest especially in low income group.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • uniforms
  • staff
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • promotes
  • belonging
  • team spirit
  • professional
  • cohesive
  • image
  • security
  • identification
  • reduces
  • expenses
  • employees
  • decide
  • wear
  • fosters
  • equality
  • minimizes
  • differences
  • individuality
  • self-expression
  • uncomfortable
  • restrictive
  • body types
  • sizes
  • maintenance
  • cleanliness
  • control
  • restriction
  • personal style
  • fashion preferences
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