The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year.

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year.
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The pie charts show the amount of
revenue
and expenditures in 2016
and
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for a children’s charity in the USA. Calibration of
date
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data
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is done in percentage.
Overall
, the total amount of
income
was just enough to cover the expenditures.
Moreover
, donated food made the highest share
in
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total
income
while
the maximum money
spent
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on program service.
To begin
with, donated food provided the most of the
revenue
for the charity, at 86%.
Similarly
, with regard to expenditures, program services,
calculated
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for nearly all of the outgoings, at 95.8%. The other categories were much smaller. Community contributions were the
second
largest
revenue
source,
brought
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in 10.4% of
overall
income
, and
this
was followed by program
revenue
, at 2.2%.
on the other hand
, investment
income
, government grants, and other
income
were very small sources of
revenue
, accounting for only 0.8% combined. There were only two other expenditure items, fundraising and management and general, with a slight difference both accounting for 2.6% and 1.6% respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words revenue, income with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • charity
  • non-profit organization
  • funds
  • revenue
  • donations
  • grants
  • fundraising
  • expenditure
  • allocations
  • administrative costs
  • program services
  • beneficiaries
  • financial year
  • breakdown
  • percentage
  • portion
  • sector
  • philanthropy
  • budgeting
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