Many people think that successful people’s accomplishments depend on the regions they come from, while other people think that it doesn’t matter where a person comes from, if that person has the will to succeed, he/she will triumph. What do you think?

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The word

success

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in the

life

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plays a significant role. Some people ponder that location and

area

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plays

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play

a crucial role behind the

success

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of any successful person while others believe that only will power to achieve a goal is more important. I think that behind any

success

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their

in or at that place

there

is hard work and proper planning to achieve

specific goal

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specific goals

a specific goal

besides

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region of

person

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a person

the person

does not

matters

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matter

. To achieve

success

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life

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is not

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easy task. A person should be

proper

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properly

dedicated and decided towards his or her goals. When they cleared that what they want to be in their

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they will do

hard work

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the hard work

with full passion.

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, they will definitely become a

successfull

having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome

successful

personality

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person

. For

this

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, it doesn't matter that whether they come from any metropolitan city and any developed region.

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, Indian 14th president Dr.

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Abdul Kalam was born in

remote

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a remote area

remote areas

the remote area

area

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kerela

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Kerela

. Even that

area

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was proper untouched with electric power. Despite of all inconveniences he became the great scientist and one of the world's greatest

leader

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leaders

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become

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has become

becomes

is becoming

possible only because of his dedication and hard work.

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, some individuals consider the factor of location behind

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. They think that, a developed city can provide all basic amenities to people

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as higher education, lots of job opportunities et

cetera

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which rural areas does not have. If the group of people is well

qualified but

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qualified, but

they do not have any jobs in their

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then

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how can they get employed?

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So, according

to some

people

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person's

location impose a great impact to be successful. To conclude, undoubtedly, people are running to achieve their desired objectives. Only

few

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a few

are concerned with the role of

hardwork

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hard work

and concentration to be a

successfull

having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome

successful

man. People should deny the impact of

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area

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the area

and region to become successful in their

life

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Relevant & specific examples

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309 words

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