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Some people think that being able to communicate with others online is breakdown geographical barriers and enabling people who would normally never have changed to meet to Communicate write advantages and disadvantages

#people #breakdown #barriers
Internet
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The internet
 provides a platform
to
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for
 people to communicate with others living in different domains
this
development
 Unites the world by breaking down geographical barriers and gives a chance to communicate with others
this
 is a will focus on both merits and demerits of
this
development
. To embark with it cannot be denied that online
communication
 has many advantages. The
first
 and foremost one is that it is very efficient and saves time and money
.
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.
Making new friends and communicating them
on
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to
 internet help people to welcome the cultural differences and help each other to understand the lifestyle of the respective Nations The
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 reason is that,
this
 form of
communication
 is very convenient and it is very cheap it only requires the internet facilities which can be afforded by everyone
.
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.
But the prime reason is with the help of
this
 platform many people are able to work from the native country
.
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.
this
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This
 can done by sending emails.
Conversely
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Conversely, this
this
development
also
 has several disadvantages. Due to online social
such
 as Instagram
,
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,
WhatsApp, and many more
,
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,
 the face to face
communication
 is on the verge of extinction
.
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.
Apart from that it does not
guarantees
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guarantee
 of one's personal security which can be exploited on social media platforms for an instance Facebook account in nearly 2 lakh people using fake ID who misused personal information of other people while chatting on social media emotion and feeling can be
misconstrue
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misconstrued
 because in
this
 kind of
communication
 we cannot portray feelings easily.
to
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To
 conclude Online
communication
 has many benefits compared to its drawback if which site some protocols and confidentiality
security
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secured
 it to
this
development
then
 it is very helpful to communicate with others and to attenuate Geographical barriers
.
Accept space
.
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