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International tourism has brought enormous benefits to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Several people believe that worldwide
tourism
 has uncountable advantages to many communities where
such
 has been established. In spite of the argument of negative implications of
tourism
 on local dwellers, in my opinion, I believe that the merits far outweigh the drawbacks. To start with, the establishment of an
attraction
Suggestion
attractive
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
centres
Centers
 has been seen as the major cause of exposure witnessed in
such
 places.
For example
, many people all over the world do travel to Jerusalem as well as
Mecca
Suggestion
a Mecca
 for yearly pilgrimage.
Thus
, the popularity that these two cities had gained over the years.
Furthermore
, the
development
 of various cities and towns that developed so rapidly in the recent has been attributed to the
tourism
 centres in those places. One clear example, was my experience when I travel to Oshogbo during my research work in the year 2000. Having been there two years earlier, I was amazed at the rapid growth and infrastructural
development
 that had taken place.
In addition
,
tourism
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
 and activities have been a remarkable source of fund generation by various governments and government agencies. In Nigeria, about two -
third
 of their annual revenue was from
tourism sector
Suggestion
the tourism sector
 of the economy.
Thus
, more money
is being spend
Suggestion
is spent
 on its
development
 across the federation. To sum up,
although
 many are of the view that
tourism
 has negative impacts on the host communities, in my opinion, I believe that the benefits of the international
tourism
such
 as community exposure, infrastructure
development
 as well as revenue generation quite outweigh the disadvantages.

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