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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing Do you agrer or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities #agrer
The popularity and surplus of online
business
is belived
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are believed
is believed
 to cause the decline and completely shutting down of towns and
cities
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city
 shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
centre
. In my
opinion it
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opinion, it
 is true that online businesses
has become
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have become
 so
common but
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common, but
 I disagree that it results
to
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in
 closures of physical stores in the future. The
convinience
the state of being suitable or opportune
convenience
conveniences
 that online shopping offers to consumers is overtly
irresistable
. From being able to shop anytime and anywhere they are, to receiving the product on the day they want and paying in on the modes easy for them. No doubt that more and more shoppers opt to do online than exhaust themselves going to
botique
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the boutique
boutique
boutiques
. Because of these reasons many sprouting
business
 ventures choose
online
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an online business
business
 as they are certain that they can fish plenty of costumers.
In
addition online
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addition, online
adding online
business
 does not require gargantuan capital to start with, and easier to manage as you can run it at the
convience
the state of being suitable or opportune
convenience
 and comfort of your own home.
Hence
 it is true that
now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
 the number of online
business
 and costumers are increasing.
However
, the sense of
ownersship
the relation of an owner to the thing possessed; possession with the right to transfer possession to others
ownership
 that physical store can bestow to its prospective buyers as the latter touch, fit or try the item is still magical. Through
this
 physical
stores
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store
 still remains attractive and will always will.
Morover
in addition
Moreover
, for those people who value the quality of any goods,
botique
a shop that sells women's clothes and jewelry
boutique
 is still their choice as they can check it right away, they can decide whether the quality suits their taste.
In addition
, it
is treacherous just send
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just treacherous sends
is treacherous just send
 your money to somebody you
do not with holding
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are not withholding
do not withholding
aren't withholding
don't withhold
do not withhold
have not withheld
 only to the hope that they can give you the product as they promise, and due to
this
 there will always be consumers who will opt to see the product and touch it before giving their money away. To conclude no matter how popular online market is,
ther
in or at that place
there
 will be no time in the future that
physical shopping centers
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the physical shopping centre
physical shopping centre
 will close down, rather
business
 owners
wilk
the capability of conscious choice and decision and intention
will
 use online and social media platform to advertise their products.

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