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Some people think that children should be taught at school to recycle materials and avoid waste. Other people believe that children should be taught this at home. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

#people #children #school #materials #waste #home
This
 table illustrates the distribution details of domestic
income
 on four different categories by five EU countries.
Firstly
, Turkey had spent more money on Food & drink than
others
Accept comma addition
others, such
such
 as 36% of their
income
.
However
, Germany had least
expenses
Suggestion
expense
 to deal with
this
category
. On Housing, UK was the one that expensed 37% of
income
. The
amount
 spent by France & Germany was more and less similar but Spain spent less
amount
 than all.
Secondly
, Germany preferred to allocate 15% of
income
 to Clothing with
highest percentage
Suggestion
the highest percentage
. While, the Spain & France considered almost equal
amount
 for
Clothing
Suggestion
the Clothing category
category
 with 7% and 8% respectively that was least than other countries. It was noted that Germany was much interested in Entertainment over other countries by spending 19% of
money
Suggestion
the money
. The least
amount
 spent
on
Suggestion
in
this
category
 by Turkey. In Summary, the focus of Turkey and UK to support people basic needs
such
 as Food & Drink and Housing. Germany was the one that spent much more on Entertainment than others. Spain invested its
income
 less than all other countries in each
category
.

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