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QUESTION: Some people spend a lot of money for their wedding ceremonies. However, others feel like it is unnecessary to spend a lot. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

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Most of the people spend more money during wedding because it is a joyful moment in everyone's life.In
wedding
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a wedding
 we call all our relatives to bless the couple with peaceful and happy life.People in our country had their own lifestyle so depending upon that they have expenditures on
marriage
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 celebrations.In my opinion spending a lot of money without facing any regrets to our well wishers is a wise decision
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 When we consider the location of
marriage
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 nowadays most of them are doing
marriage
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 in function hall which is located near our city which takes
lot
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lots
 of money for doing it. In
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 we have to provide transport facility to our relatives to attend the
marriage
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In function hall there will be more expenses like food
bill
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,
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 electricity
bill
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 etc.Some people do it in the house
itself than
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itself, then
itself then
 there will not be large expenses when compared to
marriage
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 locations. In
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 there will be less food
bill
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 and electricity
bill
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. When we consider the destination wedding it will be more costly when compared to normal marriages.Because it is done outside the country which take more time for travelling which leads to heavy investment like shopping
,
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,
room rent
,
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food
bill
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,
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transport
bill
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 etc.
This
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 type of wedding
are done
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is done
 by business tycoons and celebrities. In conclusion
,
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 each of them
having
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has
 their own life style so depending upon their guests they will make arrangements so that their expenses will be heavy or small. But spending a heavy amount may not be wise all the time.
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