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1) Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

#accessibility #university
Education is one of the important sectors. Some people think that to take
admission
 in the university for the rich one is as difficult as the poor
person
. In my opinion, it depends on the one’s knowledge and ability to take
admission
 in the university.
To begin
 with, one of the important reasons is that nowadays educational system is purely based on the merit.
This
 will not affect the
admission
, whether you are rich or poor.
For example
, to take
admission
 in the colleges, displays the merit wise name and select the
person
 having height marks.
Moreover
, some universities take entrance exams to check the
person
 having a certain quality if they pass it,
then
 they would be allowed to take the
admission
otherwise
 they were rejected.
Secondly
, the government should want to generate equality between all the citizens. To develop
this
, apply the strict rule of the all people.
This
 will create a positive environment for the youth, so they start to do the hard work
as a result
 they get the
admission
 in their favourite college.
For instance
, youth of
such
 nation has been always hard working and can change their standard of the living.
Furthermore
, there is no threat of the
person
 who takes
admission
 having not capability, after the completion of the university everyone get the job with high salary; increase the economy of the country. In conclusion, these will give the opportunity to everyone those having a skill and a knowledge not money is considered here.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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