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Many people use distance-learning programs to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the benefit as much as attending college or university. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is undeniable that the distance learning mode is very useful, especially for those living in remote areas, for those who are physically challenged and for those who want to do a job
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 studying.
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, there are many advantages
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 actually attending a
university
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, which would not accrue to a person who prefers to learn through the mode of distance education. Let us see how going to a
university
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 scores over the distance-mode.
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, one learns in a more disciplined atmosphere. One has to attend
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classes regularly and
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 time.
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 results in a more focused and systematic study.
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 leads to better preparation for the examinations and
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 better results.
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, one can easily access reference books and other valuable reading material from the
University
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 Library. Apart from the academic curriculum, the student
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 gains
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useful participation in other extra-curricular activities like sports, competitions, contests and the like. All
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 helps in the sharpening of his communication skills and the
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 development of his personality. He develops better team spirit and learns the art of working with others in a group. Another great advantage is that of campus placement opportunities. Many reputed companies approach
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good universities with offers of campus placements for their students. They are
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 saved from the uncertainty and hassles of a
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later job
 hunt.
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, a
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 education is certainly packed with several privileges'

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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