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Some people say international sports event help in world peace? Do you agree or disagree?

Some individual states that global games events are advantageous for community peace.
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 essay agrees that global games events play a vital role for world peace.
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,
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 essay will discuss the sense of
brotherhood
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 and exchange of tradition among the worldwide people and
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, it will discuss the nepotism of games authority to create new
country
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 order frequently for international events. Global games give thrive to
brotherhood
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 along with exchange of tradition all over the world. People of different communities gather in one place, play together, stay together, which develop a sense of
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 among them and obviously when people of different countries meet they share their traditions with each other.
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, in Olympics games which are started from 2014,
player
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 from all over the world gather in the same place to show
brotherhood
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 and an exchange of traditions.
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, International games authority should be very care full while organizing
event
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 as they always try to organize the
event
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 in different countries because if the
event
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 will always hold in the same
country
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 than
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 might be the injustice for other countries
player
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. Every nation should get the chance to host the
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 will support their players and
country
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 in both ways financially and sportsman spirit.
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, since 2008 Champions Trophy series of cricket is always held in India no matter which
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 team is winning and
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 leads other
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player
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 with a sense of injustice. In conclusion essay agrees that global games events are helpful for peace; provide friendship between
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 and countries, interchange traditions and bias of global games authority for building new
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 order with a regular interval of time.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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