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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph provides information about how many
households
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owning
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owned
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 and
renting
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rented
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 accommodation in England and Wales
from
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between
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 1918 and 2011.
Overall
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,
households
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 who owned
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settlement
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settlements
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 increased over the period,
while
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 the
one
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ones
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 renting
settlement
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 continued to decrease. Looking first at the data from
households
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 owning accommodation, the number of people who preferred owning a house rose significantly from around 20% at the beginning of the period to above 30% in 1939 and remained at that figure by the end of 1953. For that year, house ownership continued to grow and peaked at nearly 70% in 2001, before it dropped slightly to around 65% in the final decade. Regarding the data from
households
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 who prefer renting, there were around 85% of people
renting
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rent
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 a house at the start of the course. The number began to drop
at
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to
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 around 70% and remained stable between 1939 and 1953. Renting
settlement
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 declined dramatically and reach
at
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apply
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the same figure (exactly 50%)
with
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as
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 owning
settlement
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 in 1971. The number of renting accommodations continued to decrease unit it fell to a low point at around 30% in 2001 and rise slowly to about 36% by the end of the course.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, settlement with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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