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Now the machine is very complex, and a lot of difficult work is automated. Does this machine automation have more pros and cons?

#machine #work #automation
In the today’s world, technology is extremely in demand for the different purpose like robot, artificial intelligence,
machine
 automation etc. Nowadays, the
machine
 is very complex and a lot of hard
work
 for automated. But I would say that there is pros outweigh on cons. The advantages of machines are
,
Accept space
,
the less need of human
work
, easily reliable, easy to maintain, less time consumes etc.
Moreover
, the great learning of
machine
 will help you to tackle the new task
instead
 of working with workers.
Furthermore
, the
machine
 is used for the booking of air tickets.
Also
, for banking purposes, in computer facilities and a lot more. These will reduce the stress problem of human.
In contrast
,
this
 will difficult to learn a new
machine
 for the unskilled workers. From
this
 the unemployment rates are rapidly increasing.
Further
, the typical skilled
work
 and a creative
work
 or thought will not be done with the help of any
machine
,
also
, the
machine
 will not
work
 and think as compared to human. If the
machine
 will not
work
 properly, they damage the whole production or as well as the other
work
also
. We know all the
machine
's price is so high, to spend
this
 amount of money we will think twice.
Besides
 that if the number of machinery will higher the number of employees should be less compare with without any machinery
work
.
Therefore
, the unemployment rates go up to the sky and the countries poverty rates will increase rapidly. To conclude, I suggest that the both the pros and cons are considered equally. But
this
 will affect the entire country. So think it thrice and
then
 go for your strategy. Because it
also
 affects the entire community.

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