Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Nowadays, it has been observed that numerous people across the globe are suffering from health issues due to work for extended hours in the office and less time for outdoor activities.

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, working extra period can help you in monetary terms, but it has more cons than pros.

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, many people, especially young people is very ambitious and work alcoholic. They try to achieve the desired outcome in a short period, by involving themselves in extended hours in the office and putting their health at stake.

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, in 2007, I worked for 12 hours a day and seven days a week for 4 months continuously,

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, I got the desired promotion, but, later develop many health issues which take months to cure.

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, nowadays, it has been observed that number of divorce cases have increased significantly in the

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few years.

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is due to the less duration spent by couples, as both of them are busy working and hardly find time for themselves,

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, results in broken relationships.

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, recently my friend got divorced from his wife due to his habit of long working hours and spent less duration with his wife. Outdoor activities like going for a short trip or have a dinner in a restaurant over the weekend plays an important role in living a happy and healthy life. Not only

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these activities refresh you for the upcoming week, but

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, helps you in sharing a healthy relationship with your family. To conclude,

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, it is important to have ambitions in life, but sacrificing leisure time in lieu of work is not helpful either for the person and

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its immediate family. To maintain a balance between social and professional life, it is important to share quality period together.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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295 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

work-life balance
mental well-being
burnout
stress relief
productivity
economic growth
career progression
skill enhancement
quality time
financial security
leisure activities
physical health
personal relationships
stress-related illnesses

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Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Fully explain your ideas

Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Many claims that the fast-food industry had a negative effect on the environment, eating habits, and families. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Doctors should be responsible for educating their patients about how to improve their health.do you agree or disgree.

Some school leavers travel or work for a period of time instead of going directly to university. Do the advantages of this for their study outweigh the disadvantages?