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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is the case? What can governments do to help the amount of rubbish produced?

#rubbish #case #governments #amount
Production of garbage has been increased with the passage of time.In my
opinin
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opinion, this
opinion this
this
 is true.
This
 essay will discuss about the initiatives which are required by the
government
 in order to
reduced
Suggestion
reduce
 the left overs. I
beleived
accept as true; take to be true
believed
,
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,
due to
devlopment
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
developments
 in
infrastrucure
the basic structure or features of a system or organization
infrastructure
 and up growing
industries
Suggestion
industry
industry's
waste
producion
the act or process of producing something
production
 has been increased exponentially.
This
 is the crucial moment for every state officials and the public itself because
waste
 can cause serious damage to the health. Both
Government
 and public should play their roles at their end in order to
reduced
Suggestion
reduce
 the production of garbage or rubbish.People should avoid to throw their
grabbage
food that is discarded (as from a kitchen)
garbage
 on
road
Suggestion
the road
roads
 or on streets and always use dustbins to throw rubbish so it will help to keep them clean.
On the other hand
,
government
 should be more proactive to resolve
this
 by creating different
deaprtments
a specialized division of a large organization
departments
department
 which can keep checking industries and cleaning companies to make sure that the produced
waste
 will be minimal.
This
 will make sure that
waste
Suggestion
the waste
 produced by different industries like
checmical
relating to or used in chemistry
chemical
chemicals
,
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,
plastic can be minimal.Recycling process will help to decrease the rate of
waste
production therfore
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production, therefore
production therefore
,
government
 should invest more in
this
 area.
Awaranes
Suggestion
Awareness
 program should
organized
Suggestion
organize
 by the state to educate the
public
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public, for
for instance
, electronic media
,
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,
TV or radio can be very helpful in
this
 regard. To conclude, it is
cleared
Suggestion
clear
 that
government
 plays the vital role to
decreased
Suggestion
decrease
 the production of
waste
.
Howerver
Suggestion
However
, public help is
also
 required to speed up the process.
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