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Band 4.5

The government should close companies that produce toxic waste materials without their own waste treatment facility in order to protect the envirnonment. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

In recent years, environmental preservation has been a major concern. Whilst some people believe that authorities must shut down industrials that do not clean their own
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, I firmly disagree, as it is a harsh solution without any
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 the other factors.
This
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 essay will explain my perspectives.
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 with, outright closing
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 industries can negatively affect both the economy and society. Numerous developing nations completely rely on industries, including textile,
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,
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and mining
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, for survival, which eliminates them
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and can
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 lead an entire nation into poverty and numerous
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.
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people.
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 In Bangladesh,
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, garment factories, which are the backbone of their economy, cannot afford to build their own
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 treatment facility, and thousands of citizens will lose their jobs
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 if the government decides to remove them
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 the harmful environmental impacts without considering the other alternatives.
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, each state has the power to tackle ecological harms by lighter substitutes without forcing factories to close. Constructing a
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 management, where multiple private businesses participate
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,
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 would definitely reduce the costs, enabling several corporations to live
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 sharing the ecological responsibility.
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, governments can support greener options,
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 as recycling, renewable energy, and eco-friendly protection methods, rather than a straightforward solution of closure.
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, in Japan, groups of 12 factories are
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encouraged
 to construct one
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 management
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,
thus
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 increasing the number of clean outputs significantly.
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healthy
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 environment must be taken seriously by higher authorities, it is unreasonable to overlook all the alternatives by choosing the harshest method to tackle it. Ensuring the long-term sustainability for the economy and the livelihoods of inhabitants might only
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 through a well-established joint
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 processing facility and greener methods.

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task response
Be clear in your view. Say if you agree or not at the start.
planning
Use one main reason and give two examples.
language
Fix many spelling and word choice mistakes.
coherence
Use short, clear sentences to help the reader.
coherence
Link ideas with easy words like also, however, for example.
content
You give your own view and do not just copy.
content
You use examples from real places to back the idea.
tone
You try to keep a polite tone about a tough topic.
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