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It is often thought that the increase in Juvenile crime can be attributed to violence in the media Do you think that this is the main cause of Juvenile crime? What solutions can you offer to deal with situation

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Media plays a crucial role to influence the people positively as well as negative it is often believe that
crime
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 rates among us are associated to
violence
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 see in movies and use it is a debatable question
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violence
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 in the media only responsible to Trigger a given to do a
crime
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 is a will highlight on the cause and the solution to restrict youngsters doing
crime
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 to commence with there are several causes which can influence youngsters to participate in illegal activities the main and Prime cause is the
violence
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 which is shown in media for use it is very easy to graph
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 kind of negative things which result to do illegal activities and can be perilous
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 luminaries who do
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 and fights in movies affect people age between 13 to 25
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 people do the same things as luminaries do and end up by taking wrong step another cogent cause in the surrounding and people in which the Juvenile live bad surrounding and Bad Influence can give negative Vibes which motivates to do
violence
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 The possible solutions to attenuate
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 among youth can be done by education system by explaining adolescence about the
violence
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 and the repercussions of doing
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 which can you direct future life
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 Saudi Arabia has lowest
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 rates because they have rigorous punishment and most common one is death penalty
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 media should stop promoting illegal activities and rudimentary punishment should be implemented by law enforcement agency to person who do
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 so that will be an asset to himself as well as to others. Encapsulate gauging all the causes and measures to reduce atrocity among Juvenile I foresee a
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 free and friendly world in th
e future whi
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future, which
ch can be more beneficial to people living in the community

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