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Relevance of health care facilities to healthy living. discuss both views

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Health
care
 facilities have been improved largely
wtih
expresses the means used
with
 advancement of technology.
Health
care
 facilities have a major impact on healthy living conditions.
This
 essay will discuss how
relavant
having a bearing on or connection with the subject at issue
relevant
health
care
 facilities are with current living conditions and it
also
 explains how they are not
relavant
having a bearing on or connection with the subject at issue
relevant
 in few other aspects. Our current living condition
are mainly influenced
Suggestion
is mainly influenced
 by our current
health
care
 facilities. Many
health
 related problems are now
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 treated by these advanced facilities which now makes easier for
health
practioners
someone who practices a learned profession
practitioners
.
For instance
, facilities
such
 as
chemo
a communist nation that covers a vast territory in eastern Asia; the most populous country in the world
China
 are
now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
 used to treat cancer while doctors used to find it difficult when they treat in
traditional way
Suggestion
the traditional way
a traditional way
. These
health
care
 facilities are much interlinked with each other which can treat
alot
Suggestion
a lot
 of cases. While some of them strongly
condem
express strong disapproval of
condemn
condemned
 the fact regarding the
relavance
the relation of something to the matter at hand
relevance
relevancy
 of
health
care
 facilities and healthy living. They believe that the current living
conditon
a state at a particular time
condition
conditions
 depends on
dietery
Suggestion
diet
dietary
auditory
 and physical activities one undergoes during their
life time
the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)
lifetime
.
For example
, WHO in 2017
decalred
made known or openly avowed
declared
decreed
 that people eating unhealthy food are more likely to get hospitalised once they turn 50.
In addition
 to it, many of the
athelete's
a person trained to compete in sports
athletes
utilities
 end up living healthy as they go through
alot
Suggestion
a lot
 of physical
exercises
Suggestion
exercise
. Eating habits and physical activities are
also
 essential aspects
for
Suggestion
of
to
 having a healthy living life. So, is
health
care
facilites
a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry
facilities
relavant
having a bearing on or connection with the subject at issue
relevant
irrelevant
 to current healthy living conditions?
well their
Accept comma addition
Well, there
Well their
Well there
well there
 are certain sections of people who are against it while few of them feel they both are interlinked to each other.
This
eassy
prepare and issue for public distribution or sale
issue
easy
 discussed about how
health
care
 facilities are
relavant
having a bearing on or connection with the subject at issue
relevant
irrelevant
 to healthy living,
in addition
 it
also
 discussed few other other aspects like
dietery
of or relating to the diet
dietary
 and physical exercise
also
 play a crucial role in healthy living.
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