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Grandparents play a big role in the bringing up their grandchildren. Do you think it it useful for grandparents to be involved ? what is your opinion.

#grandparents #role #grandchildren
The table and pie
charts
Suggestion
chart
 give information about
Ashdown Museum
Suggestion
the Ashdown Museum
 before and after its refurbishment in terms of visitor number and degree of satisfaction. According to the table, the total number of visitors to
this
 museum increased dramatically from 74,000 to 92,000 after it was renovated. Results of surveys
also
 show that the overall level of satisfaction among visitors rose tremendously. Looking at the pie charts in more detail, we can see that the percentage of people who were very satisfied with the museum rose sharply from 15% to 35%, a more than double increase. Those who said that they were satisfied
also
 climbed noticeably by 10%, reaching 40%. Before the refurbishment, 40% of respondents reported that they were dissatisfied with the museum, but
this
 percentage went down to only 15% after the renovation work.
Similarly
, the figure for very dissatisfied visitors halved from 10% to 5%. Across these two years, the proportion of those who made no response to the survey remained the same at 5%.

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