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The tendency of news reports in the media to focus more on problems and emergencies rather than on positive developments is harmful to the individuals and the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The tendency of news reports in the media to focus more on problems and emergencies rather than on positive developments is harmful to the individuals and the
society
 as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Nowadays media
is focused
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are focused
 more on negative issues rather than on positive developments. It is considered by a few people to be detrimental to the individuals as well as the
society
. I argue that it is a harmful but it has a few advantages as well. In
this
 essay, the reasons why
media
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the media
is projecting
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are projecting
 negative news will be discussed. Negative media news can adversely affect the people and
society
. All sorts of media are presenting negative news on all the forums which adversely affect the
society
 in
number
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a number
 of ways.
Firstly
, these pessimistic news
bring
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brings
 feelings of hopelessness and depression among the public. The people will be confused about the safety and security of
society
 in which they are living and
as a result
 of these hopeless news they will start considering their
society
 full of crime and not a
worth living place
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place worth living
.
Secondly
, the
media reporters
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media, reporters
 exaggerate the news by creating sensational news and highlight more on the negative issues to gain popularity for their media channels. These news are later proved to be wrong and far away from the reality. But innocent viewers remain absorbed in those news which causes frustration and despair among the citizens.
On the other hand
, these
news
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news, although
although
 they are
negative but
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negative, but
 they have a few advantages. They bring awareness among the public about various social issues,
for example
, people will become more vigilant after seeing reports on theft and robbery and they will improve the ways to enhance their security.
Secondly
, by learning about the negative pressing issues, local authorities and government can plan to take remedial measures against those issues. To conclude, negative reports
on
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in
of
 the media can create
feeling
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feelings
a feeling
the feeling
 of hopelessness and frustration among the
public whereas
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public, whereas
 they can enlighten the public and local authorities to take necessary corrective measures.
Although
these
denotes a person or thing
this
 news
are
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is
unavoidable but
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unavoidable, but
 citizens and government should focus on positive aspects and should
do
engage in
make
 efforts to solve those pressing issues.

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