Adults do very less exercise these days. Some people think that showing sporting events on the television such as Olympics and World Cup tournaments can be the best way to encourage adults to do exercise. Others believe there are other effective ways to do so. Discuss both views and state your opinion

Nowadays grown ups workout less. It is considered by some people that the appropriate way to persuade adults to
exercise
is by making them watch sports like
Olympics
Suggestion
the Olympics
and World Cup on TV, whereas others think there are much better methods. In my opinion
,
Accept space
,
I feel creating
health
awareness to the elderly and regular
health
checkups motivates them to
exercise
. On the one hand, watching their favourite player in a sport event usually tends people to be more like them. In order to be physically fit like sports
celebrities one
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celebrities, one
has to
workout
Suggestion
work out
.
In addition
to it
,
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,
the adults who were active in sports years ago, would feel motivated to play seeing some games.
On the other hand
, there are yet many other ways to encourage adults to
exercise
. One way is to provide a
health
awareness campaign for elderly people to keep them updated on the
health
issues while another method is my conducting frequent
health
 checkups.
Inorder
Suggestion
In order
to stay healthy the adults will be motivated by themselves to
exercise
without any external pressure.
Finally
, in my
opinion I
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opinion, I
feel self motivation is the best way to encourage an adult to
exercise
and stay fit.
This
for some can be achieved by watching a sports event while for others it might be through monitoring their
health
.
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