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Earlier, people wore clothes which were related to their culture. But now, people wear same type of clothes al over the world. Is this positive or negative development.

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Globalization has in fact played a major role in the change in fashion industry.
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 to the past
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when people were inclined to be dressed up in their traditional costumes wherever they went,
now
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now, however
however
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 they wear clothes that are similar across the globe. In my opinion
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I believe it is a positive development as it unites people from different backgrounds and
also
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 allow them to
dress
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 comfortably and modestly.
To begin
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 with, each country has its own traditions and cultures which are indulged in their local costumes.Travelling to a foreign country wearing traditional clothes might cause a hindrance in communication with the foreigners
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whereas wearing a common
dress
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 would make them have a sense of unity and easily break the ice between them.
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, wearing
same type
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the same type
 of clothes unites people from different
backgrounds
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backgrounds, hence
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 making it easy to collaborate with each other.
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, people are able to give importance to their comfort while choosing a
dress
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. Traditional dresses,
for example
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saree takes hours for a beginner to wear and is uncomfortable during hot summers so is the case with other countries ethnic wears. Whereas, western
wears
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wear
 are considered to be most comfortable for people living in all kinds of weather.
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, casuals like jeans and
t shirt
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a t shirt
 or formals like shirts and trousers are the top picks of
most
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the most
. To conclude, I think that dressing
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 across the world is a positive development not only because it gives them a sense of unity but
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 lets them
dress
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 with comfort.

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