the pie chart below shows the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010.

the pie chart below shows the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010.
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pie chart provides information about the
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house
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in a state between the year 1950 till 2010.
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largest segment of the pie chart in 1950,
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the least popular.
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most popular segment in the year 2010,
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transportation experienced a lower percentage. In 1950 housing contributed 72,1% of the total expenditures.
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second
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food, with a percentage of 11,2%. The average
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education
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6,6%. The rest of the categories contributed between 4,4% and 2,4%. The largest
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in 2010 was food with a percentage of 34,0%.
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Furthermore
,housing showed a number of 22,0%. Other and transportation were relatively the same, with 14,0% and 19,2%. The least spendings were on
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healthcare and education, with 4,5% and 6,3%.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • household budget
  • economic development
  • lifestyle changes
  • inflation
  • cost of living
  • disposable income
  • necessities
  • luxury goods
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • financial priorities
  • consumer behavior
  • allocation of funds
  • fiscal habits
  • longitudinal comparison
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