Some people like to spend their leisure time with their colleagues while others prefer to keep their private life separate from their work life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Although
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it is sometimes thought that personal and professional
life
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during
leisure
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time
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should be maintained
separate
Suggestion
separately
, other people think it could be helpful in their career. In my opinion, I believe we should not mix both because it could bring serious issues. On the one hand, there are multiple common issues experienced when professional stuff enters into the private matters.
Firstly
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, there is
increase
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an increase
in
number
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the number
of sexual harassment cases getting reported where colleagues have spent
leisure
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time
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together and post separation it has caused issues as
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work place
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a work place
the work place
.
For example
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, “Me too” movement where
lot
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a lot
of people were blamed for exploitation after so many years.
Secondly
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, when people working in
same office
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the same office
go for
leisure
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time
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, they mostly do
work
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related conversation and not enjoy much as compared to private
time
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spent with family or friends.
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, another serious issue could be that important office secrets are shared in personal meetings under the influence of alcohol.
On the other hand
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, some people are able to strike the balance between professional and personal
life
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really well. These people take
lot
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lots
of benefits because of
this
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unique ability. Admittedly, we have seen cases where
supervisor
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the supervisor
supervisors
a supervisor
and team members are well connected in their personal
life
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and are supported by the supervisor for growth.
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, if personal matters are shared at
work
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place
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place, then
then
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it gives
opportunity
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an opportunity
the opportunity
to understand each other better, and helps in reducing stress.
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, when people build strong bonding and enjoy
leisure
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time
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together
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then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
it reduces conflict at
work
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place. To conclude, we must maintain
distance
Suggestion
a distance
between personal and professional and personal
life
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. We should not cross the thin line as it could bring lot of serious consequences as compared to the small benefits it might give.
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