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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

#minutes #topic #country #health #service #treatments
Heathy
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Healthy
 citizens are the true power of
country
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a country
the country
.In my point of view
atleast
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at least
 access to basic free
heath
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
 care should be
priority
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a priority
the priority
 of any
government excuding
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government, excluding
government excluding
 few treatments which are new and are of higher cost. Every
indivial
a human being
individual
 when paying taxes have right to expect something in return from
govrnment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 for
examle
an item of information that is typical of a class or group
example
 better infrastructure
,
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,
safe community
,
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,
good and free medical services etc.
Although
 all are very important aspects of any
societ but
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society, but
society but
 health comes on top.According to survey 22% of
worlds children especially
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the world's children, especially
the world's children especially
world's children especially
 in
asian
a native or inhabitant of Asia
Asian
 countries lost their lives due to no treatment even for the easily curable diseases like
Malayria
an infective disease caused by sporozoan parasites that are transmitted through the bite of an infected Anopheles mosquito; marked by paroxysms of chills and fever
malaria
,
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,
Flu etc.Those poor parents who
can not
can not
cannot
 afford two meals in a day how they can pay
doctors fee
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a doctors fee
the doctors fee
.Authorities for
exmaple were
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example, we're
example were
example we're
exmaple we're
 able to completely remove polio with free treatment.
In addition
 to it in
rura
living in or characteristic of farming or country life
rural
 areas one out of three patients dies in road
acciedent
an unfortunate mishap; especially one causing damage or injury
accident
accidents
 because they cannot get
first
 aid on time due to non-payments.
Furthermore
, we have many organisations working together to treat patients suffering from
diesess
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
diseases
 like
cancer which
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cancer, which
 costs
much but
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much, but
 it looks like easily curable
disese
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
disease
diseases
diocese
 are being ignored
,
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,
we do understand treating kidney transplants
,
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,
heart surgeries are
impossibe
not capable of occurring or being accomplished or dealt with
impossible
 to make
competely
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
completely
 free
for
Suggestion
from
of
 any
governmnet
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 it
wil
the capability of conscious choice and decision and intention
will
 be a burden on annual budget
,
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,
but they can find a way to solve
this
 by working with insurance companies to provide relief to citizens to some extend. To sum up, in my opinion any kind of ailment is not small
,
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,
but
diseses
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a disease
disease
the disease
diseases
 which costs very less money should
definately
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
 be provided free to
evry
(used of count nouns) each and all of the members of a group considered singly and without exception
every
 individual of
nation
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the nation
this
shoud
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
 be their
first
 right along with food
,
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,
cyhes
 and shelter.
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