In Spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

There is no doubt that l
ately lots
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lately, lots
of innovation and improvement made in
cultivation
, but some part of the globe still struggling with
starvation
and famine. There are many reasons which in
this
essay I will explore a few of them and I will state steps can be taken to tackle
this
problem. Here are two main factors to blame.
First
and foremost, unfortunately, these i
nnovation
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innovations
and new sophisticated agricultural facilities and systems are not available in poor countries, which are most vulnerable in term of
food
security.
For instance
, farmers in a few African countries still using Middle Ages equipment for
c
ultivation
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cultivation, such
such
as handmade tools for harvesting crops and animals for transportation.
Thus
, if their crops infected by diseases, they are unable to salvage them.
Consequently
, they lose their only source of
food
.
Furthermore
, one a
nother
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
problem is lack of agricultural lands. In the latest decade witnesses indicate that every y
ear millions
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year, millions
hectare of agricultural lands occupied by constructions and factories.
This
reduction of land for
cultivation
in its own right increase
food
price.
As a result
, economically d
isadvantage
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disadvantaged
families could not afford to have enough
food
. Global
food
security issue can certainly be improved. International organizations
such
as the United Nation could co-operate with those countries that their people suffer from
starvation
by providing contemporary agricultural facilities and systems for indigenous farmers. Particularly those who are living in far-off district and village.
Also
, holding workshops for farmers to teaching them about c
rops’
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crop
diseases and mitigation will be useful.
Moreover
, to increase agricultural l
ands building
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lands, building
dams to control the w
ater which
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water, which
is vital for
cultivation
could help agriculture.
Therefore
, boosting c
rops
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crop
production will cause falling the
food
price, so it will improve the situation for poor families. In conclusion, even perhaps w
ith
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in
sophisticated agricultural equipment world will face more
starvation
, unless, international authorities contribute with poor countries to support farmers, as well as, constructing dams would help to avoid wasting w
aters
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water
and improve agriculture which helps to radically tackle the world
starvation
problem.
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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