In Spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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There is no doubt that l

ately lots

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lately, lots

of innovation and improvement made in

cultivation

, but some part of the globe still struggling with

starvation

and famine. There are many reasons which in

this

essay I will explore a few of them and I will state steps can be taken to tackle

this

problem. Here are two main factors to blame.

First

and foremost, unfortunately, these i

nnovation

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innovations

and new sophisticated agricultural facilities and systems are not available in poor countries, which are most vulnerable in term of

food

security.

For instance

, farmers in a few African countries still using Middle Ages equipment for

ultivation

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cultivation, such

such

as handmade tools for harvesting crops and animals for transportation.

Thus

, if their crops infected by diseases, they are unable to salvage them.

Consequently

, they lose their only source of

food

Furthermore

, one a

nother

not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied

other

problem is lack of agricultural lands. In the latest decade witnesses indicate that every y

ear millions

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year, millions

hectare of agricultural lands occupied by constructions and factories.

This

reduction of land for

cultivation

in its own right increase

food

price.

As a result

, economically d

isadvantage

Suggestion

disadvantaged

families could not afford to have enough

food

. Global

food

security issue can certainly be improved. International organizations

such

as the United Nation could co-operate with those countries that their people suffer from

starvation

by providing contemporary agricultural facilities and systems for indigenous farmers. Particularly those who are living in far-off district and village.

Also

, holding workshops for farmers to teaching them about c

rops’

Suggestion

crop

diseases and mitigation will be useful.

Moreover

, to increase agricultural l

ands building

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lands, building

dams to control the w

ater which

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water, which

is vital for

cultivation

could help agriculture.

Therefore

, boosting c

rops

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crop

production will cause falling the

food

price, so it will improve the situation for poor families. In conclusion, even perhaps w

ith

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sophisticated agricultural equipment world will face more

starvation

, unless, international authorities contribute with poor countries to support farmers, as well as, constructing dams would help to avoid wasting w

aters

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water

and improve agriculture which helps to radically tackle the world

starvation

problem.

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11Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Grammar mistakes
 

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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Topic Vocabulary:

inequality
distribution
access to resources
climate change
natural disasters
political factors
economic factors
agricultural practices
infrastructure
transportation
population growth
education
knowledge
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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