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In many places, new homes are needed ,but the only space available for building them is in the countryside.Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there What us your opinion about this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience Write atleast 250 words

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the countryside
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 free from newly built homes. Shortage of spaces to live is becoming a major issue and its related problems are increasing day by day. Due to industrialisation ,
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ts of spaces are taken by big factories and the entire area is taken by them for their expansion.
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, people in the nearby area are suffering from the lack of spaces to own an agricultural
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 or a space to live freely. So ,p
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the countryside
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 issue, fertile lands are drilled and dug
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, these lands loo
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fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
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eir fertility and its yielding capacity thereby becoming a barren
land
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, recently in the town of Cochin ,
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built
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 without the permission of the government was demolished since it caused health and environmental problems to the local people living nearby. In my opinion ,
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untryside needs to be protected and make them a good yielding ground for farmers. A step from the government should be taken in
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 regard. Inappropriate building or houses that creates an issue to
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land
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 should be eradicated and the real beauty of every cou
ntry side sh
rural regions
countryside
ould not be made dimmer. People should make a point to conserve
countryside
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's yield and must not destroy by creating tall buildings or by using chemical fertilisers that disturbs human food chain. In conclusion, a village area or a
countryside
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 is gifted by nature.It should not be damaged ,
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t protected. Nature has given enough and more for humans to live peacefully, but it is them who destroys it and make nature reply back with natural calamities.

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