You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction

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accomodation

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accommodation

provided to me by the college authorities at Room 203 in the H1

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hostel. The situation of sharing the room With John Owen is becoming very challenging day by day. John likes to party quite often and always invites his friends to the room. They drink and play loud music till late

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at least 2 to 3 days every week. I have spoken to him regarding the same and requested him to party outside the hostel since it has started to affect my studies.

However

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discussion could not help us come to a viable compromise. Emphatically stating, I am not able to concentrate on my assignments and study for the exams which are just around the corner. Being a competitive student, I always aim to score more than satisfactory marks and I fear that

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situation will have a detrimental effect on my future.

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, I personally do not appreciate alcohol consumption inside hostel premises. I request you to provide another suitable

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with a student who is responsible and more into studies, which will allow me to concentrate better. As it is a very sensitive issue and our entire future depends on the way we perform in our exams, I am eagerly looking forward to

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a positive response from you. Yours sincerely, David Thompson

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Task Achievement: 9.0

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accommodation officer
roommate
share a room
living arrangement
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noise levels
study environment
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single room
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