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In the modern world, people are no longer necessary to use food from animals or product from animals such as medicine and clothing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, it is unnecessary for humans to consume animal-based
food
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 and items. I completely agree with
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 view, even though many people believe that human independence on animals is impossible. There are numerous alternatives to animals in the
food
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 industry. With the abundant availability of
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 as grains and pulses, it is easy to get all the nutrients needed, which is rich in fibre, helping prevent cancer of the colon. Scientists have successfully invented alternative foods taste like meat, but are made of soybeans. Citizens eating these fake meat dishes can remain vegetarian and still get the nutrients they need. Many studies show that a plant-based diet not only provides sufficient nutrients for our body to function normally, but
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 helps us prevent various potential health issues
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 as diabetes, high blood pressure or heart attacks. In terms of clothing, humans do not need to sacrifice animals' life, for producing jackets or jeans. Today, artificial fur and high-quality synthesized fabric are being used to replace fur and other body parts of animals. Clothes made of these materials are warmer and softer than the natural materials and waste less initial and maintenance cost.
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, +animal testing has played an essential role in the medical field. In recent years,
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, with the development of technology, we can alter animal experiments with sophisticated computer programs that could provide more accurate results.
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, computer-based testing has been used to test the safety of new drugs or cancer treatments and has proved effective. It is,
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, no longer necessary to use animals for new medicine testing or treatments. In conclusion, I firmly hold the view that in modern life inhabitants no longer need to use products from animals,
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 as
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, clothing items or even medicine.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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