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More and more people today are drinking sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons for this? What are the solutions?

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As the growth of food and beverage industry is becoming increasingly noticeable. It is undeniable that the vast majority of people would prefer drinking sugary drinks.
This
 essay will discuss why
this
 happens and will illustrate a couple of reasons to overcome
this
 problem.
To begin
 with, more and more people are addicted to sweet drinks due to their sweet and delicious flavours. The reason behind
this
 is that these drinks include high amounts of glucose and fructose, which are considered as essential ingredients to give them the taste of sweetness.
Although
 these ingredients may have a negative impact on people, they tend to consume
such
 drinks on a daily basis.
For instance
, the Pepsi Company is considered as one of the highest drinks seller in the globe due to magnificent taste that their products have despite the negative effect on people in the long run, which can be resulted in diabetes and cholesterol. In order to tackle
this
 phenomenon, people should be aware regarding these products and
thus
 they should know about how harmful are these ingredients on them in the long run.
Moreover
, they should start looking for better sources of sugar alternatives as they can be found in natural fruit drinks.
For example
, a can of a Pepsi may contain almost nine spoons of white sugar, which exceeds the daily amount that a human consumes, while a cup of orange juice will contain the needed amounts of sugars and other useful minerals. To conclude, despite of the great taste that a sugar-based drink has, people should seek alternatives and be more conscious about the substances in these drinks as
such
 substances could have a negative impact on them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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