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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside.Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there What is your opinion about this ? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from you own knowledge or experience .Write atleast 250 words.

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Many places have a necessity of newly build houses
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Accept space
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but due to
unavailablity
the quality of not being available when needed
unavailability
 of
spaces
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the spaces
 they are forced to build in the
countryside
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.Some have the opinion that a step should be taken to protect
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countryside
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the countryside
 and make the
land
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 free from newly built homes. Shortage of spaces to live is becoming a major issue and its related problems are increasing day by day. Due to industrialisation
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Accept space
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lots of spaces are taken by big factories and the entire
area
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 is taken by them for their expansion.
Therefore
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,
Accept space
,
people in
nearby
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the nearby area
nearby areas
area
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 are suffering from the lack of spaces to own an agricultural
land
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 or a space to live freely.So
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people migrate to
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countryside
Suggestion
the countryside
 and plan for a plot to build houses.Due to
this
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 issue
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fertile lands are drilled and dug and
as a result
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,
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these lands
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
 their fertility and its yielding capacity
therby
by that means or because of that
thereby
 becoming a barren
land
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.
For example
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, recently in the town of Cochin
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three flats that were built
on
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in
 the
countryside
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 without the permission of the government were demolished since it caused health and environmental problems to the local people living nearby. In my opinion
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,
countryside
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 needs to be protected and make them a good yielding ground for farmers.A step from the government should be taken in
this
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 regard.
Inappropraite
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Inappropriate
 buildings or houses that creates an issue
to
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of
 the
land
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 should be eradicated and the real beauty of every
countryside
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 should not be destroyed.People should make a point to conserve
non urban
Suggestion
the non urban area
area
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 and must not damage by creating tall structures or by using chemicals that disturbs
normaln
conforming with or constituting a norm or standard or level or type or social norm; not abnormal
normal
 food chain. In conclusion
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a village
area
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 or a
countryside
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 is a gift of nature.It should not be damaged
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but protected.Authorities should make a point that illegal grabbing of lands or plots should be strictly banned under law and strict measure should be taken if they violate any related rules regarding
land
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 property.

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