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The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in the society? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, smoking cigarettes are expanding day by day.
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, Smoking becomes like a fashion for the new generation.Whereas, People's knows that smoking is injurious to
health but
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health, but
 they didn't stop for smokes.
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, They are totally addicted to
this
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 habit.
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, I thought that people are blindly involved
on
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in
with
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this things
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these things
this thing
.They are smoking for fun, relaxing and to relief the
stress but
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stress, but
 it may cause very badly. In cigarettes there are harmful chemical which is dangerous to health.
if
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If
 smoking is
increase
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increasing
 widely though, considerably people's are
died
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dying
 due to poor health condition.
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, there are possibility of decrease the rate of smoking by showing advertisements against smoking on television.
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,
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, excessively people are dying annually from cancer
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lungs disease and throat cancer.
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 type of record or things should be shown through the medium of advertisement.
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, counsel program should be organized in different places like school and in the media sector. Smoking should be strongly prohibited in public places
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educational and hospital areas. In conclusion, given program will helps us to reduce smoking.
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,
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we have to try to make smoking free zone in everywhere.
smoking
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Smoking
 takes our life so, I want to say that stop smokes and lives
healthy life
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a healthy life
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, save money from buying cigarettes.
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