Some people believe that the increasing number of vehicles is one of the biggest problem facing cities, while others believe that cities have bigger challenges. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Increasing population in cities causes using more vehicles in it,
this
issue is the main concern of some people and they worry about the future of these cities and
also
the planet, but other people think that cities have more important consideration to fix rather than congestion of vehicles. I believe that environmental problem because of transport systems have irrespective results and all people should be
chase
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chased
with it. In the modern world, people have purchasing power to buy more cars or use other transport
vehicles but
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vehicles, but
result
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a result
of
this
event can have some important drawbacks like
air
pollution and increased stress. More cars cause more
air
pollution which
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pollution, which
it leads to health problems, as we know some metropolis are the cities that have so many opportunities for people to find the jobs and having better
healthcare
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health care
systems, But people of these cities suffer from the
air
pollution from the cars contaminating,
for example
, Tehran is a big city and people spend most of their times in traffic especially at rush hours and some day because of
air
contaminate from car congestion, schools close and elderlies Should not allow to going outside.
On the other hand
, some people say that we are more important problems that we people should be
deal
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dealt
with like economic difficulties, juvenile delinquency and
also
rate crimes. And the increasing number of vehicles should not the priorities of
problem
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the problem
the government and societies can handle it. In conclusion, I personally believe that people should concern about
increasing amount
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the increasing amount
increasing amounts
an increasing amount
of transport vehicles because it can be dangerous for their mental and physical health, but by saying that it does not mean
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
problem like rate crimes or having a better health care system does not important but it is important to prioritize them.
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