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Ordinary People Try to copy famous people either reading magazines or watching TV. Why do they do this. Do you think it is a good idea to copy famous people

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Venerable person is copied by lay people either by reading magazines or watching
TV
. Voluminous reason is behind
this
 psychological effect, but the predominant reasons are content and the content’s player itself. Since 80% story plays are fictitious base, which has nothing to do with reality, that’s why to become a replica of the character and putting drama scenarios in real life seems aberrant.
Firstly
, as per famous
physiatrist
, 80% of patient among the routine visit list are those who are readers of baseless novels or those who are incessant in watching the movies. By discussing their
behavioral
of or relating to behavior
behavioural
 issues,
physiatrist
 says,”
such
 people discrete from their original
personality behavior
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personality, behaviour
personality behaviour
, for
society people
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society, people
 they become
nuisance but
Suggestion
a nuisance, but
a nuisance but
 still they are considered the part of the society and they must be
cure
Suggestion
cured
 under preventive measures”.
In addition
, imaginary effects can easily be seen among children, which destroys the personality building in them.
This
 is due to lack of care and communication with their kids. According to Famous
physiatrist
 Cheng
wo of
make barking sounds
woof
 China Says” Mothers
to carry
Suggestion
carry
 on their daily
house hold
a social unit living together
household
 activities, make the children
to sit
Suggestion
sit
 before television, without interrupting them. Interruption is necessary to keep them
involve
Suggestion
involved
 in daily words”.
So according
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So, according
 to Mr.
cheng
Suggestion
Cheng
 Wo, interruption and involving children in normal communication while they are watching
TV
 is the focal point, and plays will distort less than usual
TV
 watching ways. In a Nut Shell, one could believe that putting up baseless scenarios on own personality by
readings
Suggestion
reading
 novels and watching
TV
considers
Suggestion
considered
 unacceptable in society and
hence
, not a good idea to act
accordingly
. The only way to
coup
brick that is laid sideways at the top of a wall
cope
 up with the growing phenomena is to involve people in physical activities even it is confined to
brisk walk
Suggestion
a brisk walk
 and it is
only way
Suggestion
the only way
 to keep mental and
behavioral
of or relating to behavior
behavioural
 balance.
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