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Food travels thousand of miles from far to consumer. Some people think it could be better to our enviroment and economic of people only are local produced food. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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Nowadays we can buy
food
that is
 made in places that are far from us. There are some debates about whether it is positive or negative. I will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of the long-time travelling
food
 in
this
 essay. The
first
 advantage is that our lives become more
colorful
having striking color
colourful
 because of that. We can eat
food
 from all over the
country
 and all over the world.
On the other hand
, farmers can sell their products to the whole
country
, even export them to foreign countries,
thus
 helping them make more money. It is a win-win for the consumers and the
food
 providers. More importantly, the ability of travelling
food
 thousand of miles helps solving the problem of lacking
food
. If a city or a
country
 suffers from starvation,
food
 can be easily transferred to that place. It is a big achievement in human history.
However
, there are
also
 some disadvantages. Local farmers now have to face the competition from farmers in other cities or other countries.
Moreover
, if a
country
 has very little ability to provide
food
 by itself and has to rely on
food
 imported from other countries, it may have a negative influence on its national security. It is less likely to happen in my opinion because the importance of
food
 is a common knowledge now. Usually, the government will make sure it has the ability to provide enough
food
 for its own. From where I stand, I think it is a positive development that
food
 can travel far to the consumer. We now have a better life due to
this
 development.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon footprint
  • locally produced
  • carbon emissions
  • support local farmers
  • strengthen the community's economy
  • freshness
  • nutritional value
  • seasonal eating
  • varied and balanced diet
  • higher prices
  • economies of scale
  • limited variety
  • economic viability
  • food shortages
  • climate dependency
  • instability in food supply
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