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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #choices
With the development of science and technology, the ways to live/spend days have been increased.
However
, some people assert that we are now having an excessive amount of options in our lives. As far as I am concerned, I totally agree with it.
To begin
 with, we are having too many choices when trying to meet our basic needs. Seeing from eating, we are free to choose
from eating
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from, eating
 ways, eating times and foods. As long as you are in a modern city, the streets are filled with restaurants serving foods from different nations and working at different times. It enables people to choose eating French brunch in the morning, British afternoon tea for break and Chinese local cuisine for dinner within a single day. If you don’t want to leave home, you can even order food online to meet your needs, thanks to the creation of various applications.
However
, when I was trying to choose delivered food, I always spent a lot of time choosing what to eat, since there are hundreds of options showed in the applications waiting for me to select from. When it comes to entertainment, the choices became even more. Take
video
 watching as an example. Needless to say, cinema is a great
place providing
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place, providing
 movies produced all over the world. Outside movie
theaters
a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented
theatres
theatre
,
video
 resources come to us through various online platforms in different kinds. We can watch complete TV dramas and see
latest
Suggestion
the latest
 films in applications like Netflix.
Websites
Suggestion
Web sites
 like YouTube provides platforms for individual
video
 sharing. Recently in China, a new type, called short
video
, is created according to user habit, adding to the total amount of
video
 watching methods.
Nonetheless
, so many choices like
this
 make it too easy for people to entertain anytime and anywhere they want.
As a result
, the number of people getting addicted to watching videos online increased,
thus
 seriously affecting their normal life and work. Devices like smartphone allows choices to be made with just one simple tap on the screen. In my perspective, people doing less outdoor activities
also
 credits to the easy approach to numerous choices. From
this
 point of view, there is no doubt that we are now having too many choices in our daily life. As far as I am concerned, to have plentiful choices can bring us convenience in some cases, while in other areas they may have some negative effects. In conclusion, having too many of them is good, but we should have a correct view of them and not let ourselves go astray.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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