Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are tought to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adult. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There are a lot of people agreeing with the idea which is we should increase the number of competitive children while others think that they must be more sociable in order to be
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successful citizens
a successful citizen
in the future. In my point, the letter view is more reasonable and I will discuss
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, there is no doubt, there is a development in places in which have competitive atmosphere.
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advantages
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person may hesitate to compete with someone Clearly, sociable person tends to be
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good partners
a good partner
and everyone enjoys with his or her company. I strongly believe that
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interesting point is they are very flexible and can work or study wherever they want as they will not have trouble with communication. In these days, a person who is good at communicate and understand someone are the most successful. All in all, competition is not so
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bad, but
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cooperates
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satisfied
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sense of achievement
  • Personal growth
  • Strive to excel
  • Motivate
  • Reach full potential
  • Determination
  • Resilience
  • Failures and setbacks
  • Team skills
  • Harmoniously
  • Critical life skill
  • Professional environments
  • Empathy
  • Instill
  • Balanced approach
  • Well-rounded individuals
  • Personal accomplishment
  • Collective success
  • Competition
  • Cooperation
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