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More and more people are choosing to eat ready-made meals rather than freshly cooked food. Does this trend have more advantages than disadvantages?

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Food
 is a basic demand for
every day
found in the ordinary course of events
everyday
 Life. In recent years,
Food
 has become a every task rather than being treated as vital for living. Nowadays, Ready made foods has become more common and convenient for
people whereas
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people, whereas
 freshly cooked
food
 are less preferred. In
this
 essay we will discuss both advantages and disadvantages. Ready made foods are easy to
cook but
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cook, but
 the purpose is not served completely.Purpose of
food
 is to provide nutrition and energy to our body.Ready made foods
does not provide
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do not provide
 nutrition as ingredients are pre cooked.As ready made foods are
pre cooked
cooked partially or completely beforehand
precooked
 and packed, there are possibilities of contamination and chemicals used for longer expiration of
food
 are harmful to humans.
life
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Life
 span of humans has reduced due to
this
 and physically humans become malnutrition.
This
also impact
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also impacts
has also impacted
is also impacting
 infants.Health issues
has become
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have become
major concern
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a major concern
 in our country due to these ready made foods.
For example
, proven record shows that heart attack has increased due to
chnage
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changes
change
 in
food
 habits.
obesity
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Obesity
 has increased due to these ready made foods. Freshly made
food
 are good for health and nutrition of the
food
 remains till consumption. These foods are
fresh
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fresher
 and tastier than ready made foods. Though freshly made foods have certain disadvantages
such
 as it is time consuming and does not suit the lifestyle where both parents are working.
as
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As
example
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an example
,
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,
working women's prefer ready made foods as they are exhausted on their day to day work and does not get time to cook. Overall,
food
 is vital for a healthy lifestyle. Fast foods
provides
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provide
 faster health issues. I conclude saying freshly cooked
food
 are healthier and is best
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