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People generally know that the environment is important. However, most individuals still don’t take responsibility to protect the environment. Why is this? What should be done to encourage people to protect the environment?

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Environment plays an important role in the survival of human beings as well as a home to a variety of species.
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, only a few serious actions are being taken at the individual level to preserve our habitat.
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 essay will explain the reasons why human beings are not paying attention to nature and the measures that governments should take to address that problem. There are two main reasons why most individuals are still indifferent to the environment. One reason is that mankind has become materialistic. They don’t take care of na
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nature, but
hey are worried about their status in society. They spend a lot of money on buying things which meet their needs and satisfy them,
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 as luxurious cars, sm
artphones,…
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smart phones
 rather than protecting the environment.
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, people tend to expect scientists and governments to solve environmental problems as they are too complex for individuals to cope with.
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, many people feel that time and money are better spent on solving immediate problems
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 as housing shortage and traffic congestion than on preventing the natural disaster
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 only predicted to happen in the future. The governments should take some proactive measures to make people more environmentally responsible.
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, they must nurture individual awareness of the natural law of cause and effect. All individuals should realize that whatever we do to the environment, it will return to ourselves.
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, they can make use of the mass media to instill the urgent need of taking care of the ecology into the psyche of each and every member of our planet. They can
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 impose “ green taxes” on commuters, drivers and airline companies. Nature is a gift by
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od to mankind and it is the responsibility of every human being to take care of it. As an individual, we can do something to reduce the negative impact of human activities on the planet
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 of doing nothing.

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