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QUE: Government should spend money on railways rather than road. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#government #money #railways #road
Government should provide cash on railways more than
road
Suggestion
a road
roads
the road
.In my opinion, the
money
 should give more to
road
Suggestion
a road
the road
 not a
railways
Suggestion
railway
.
Firstly
,
Accept space
,
one of the
reason
Suggestion
reasons
 for providing more
money
 to
road
 because the
road
 makes more problems in today life.The major problem was accidents of motor
vechicle
a conveyance that transports people or objects
vehicle
vehicles
.
Accept space
.
This
 happens because the making of
road
Suggestion
a road
the road
roads
 is not
proplerly
in the right manner
properly
.There are some holes and space are increasing on
road
Suggestion
the road
 due to the continuous use.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
,
Accept space
,
when the
road
 is not clear, it will badly affect the people's life.In case of railways the problems are rare
,
Accept space
,
because there is only one transportation is here that one is railway.In
such
 situation,
wheels
Suggestion
the wheels
are changing
Suggestion
were changing
 at that time, the problems will
occurs
Suggestion
occur
 on
railway but
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the railway, but
the railway but
a railway but
 there is no need
to
Suggestion
for
lot
Suggestion
a lot
lots
 of
money
 there.
Secondly
,
Accept space
,
the
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 reason is transportation. In case of
road
,
Accept space
,
 the transportation
are
Suggestion
is
 different like car
,
Accept space
,
bike
,
Accept space
,
bus and so on are here.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 there
road
 is congested to move people through
road
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 if we can increase the thickness of
road
Suggestion
the road
, it will reduce the accidents like severe problems.
sometimes
Suggestion
Sometimes
,
Accept space
,
it's
need
Suggestion
needed
 more
money
 for construction.
That is
 why
iam
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
am
 not agree to spend
money
 on
raliway
Suggestion
railways
railway
. To conclude,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that
goverentment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 should give rupees
to
Suggestion
into
road
Suggestion
the road
 is a good thing rather than
railway
Suggestion
a railway
the railway
railways
.
because
Suggestion
Because
 the
road
make
Suggestion
makes
 huge problems than railways
.
Accept space
.

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