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The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008.

The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008.
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The pie charts give information about the production of
electricity
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 sources over the years between 2003 and 2005 in 4 different countries.
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,
most
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 common
electricity
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 sources are fossil fuel and
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hydro
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hydropower
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power
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 for Vietnam, India produced most of its
electricity
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 from fossil fuel,
for
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and for
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 Morocco, the main
electricity
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 source was
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hydro
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hydropower
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power
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. The majority of
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power
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the power
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 supply
were
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was
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 manufactured from
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hydro
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hydropower
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power
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 and nuclear
power
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unlike
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 other
counries
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countries
. Among for countries,
four fifths
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 of Indian
electricity
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 depended on fossil fuel,
while
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this
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 source was the least common in
Sweden
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 and Morocco, which accounted
only
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for only
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 4 and 5 per cent.
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Hydro
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Hydropower
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power
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 was mostly used in Morocco(95
per
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cent),
Sweden
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 and Vietnam where about half of their
electricity
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 production was produced from
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hydro
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hydropower
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power
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(
Sweden
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 52%, Vietnam 44%).
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 in India
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hydro
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hydropower
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power
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 was one of the rarely used
electricity
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source
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sources
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 compared to other countries. Nuclear
power
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 was the lion's share in
Sweden
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 where 44 per cent of
electricity
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 production was responsible
by
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for
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 nuclear
power
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, in India was the least one (4%)

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, hydro, power, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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