The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008.
The pie charts give information about the production of
electricity
sources over the years between 2003 and 2005 in 4 different countries.
Overall
, most
common Correct article usage
the most
electricity
sources are fossil fuel and hydro
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hydropower
power
for Vietnam, India produced most of its electricity
from fossil fuel, for
Morocco, the main Correct word choice
and for
electricity
source was hydro
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hydropower
power
. The majority of power
supply Correct article usage
the power
were
manufactured from Change the verb form
was
hydro
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hydropower
power
and nuclear power
unlike
other Add the comma(s)
,unlike
counries
.
Among for countries, Correct your spelling
countries
four fifths
of Indian Add a hyphen
four-fifths
electricity
depended on fossil fuel, while
this
source was the least common in Sweden
and Morocco, which accounted only
4 and 5 per cent. Change preposition
for only
Hydro
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Hydropower
power
was mostly used in Morocco(95 per
cent), Change preposition
apply
Sweden
and Vietnam where about half of their electricity
production was produced from hydro
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hydropower
power
(Sweden
52%, Vietnam 44%). While
in India hydro
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hydropower
power
was one of the rarely used electricity
source
compared to other countries.
Nuclear Change to a plural noun
sources
power
was the lion's share in Sweden
where 44 per cent of electricity
production was responsible by
nuclear Change preposition
for
power
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, hydro, power, sweden with synonyms.
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