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Some people think that public libraries are no longer important, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Although
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 there are people who believe that public libraries are unnecessary in the modern age, there are still people who think
otherwise
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. In my opinion, libraries are not important in
this
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 day of age because modern technology has made it possible to store information or books digitally. In the one hand, public libraries house numerous books and important documents in physical form,
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therefore now
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therefore, now
, people believe
such
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 buildings are not important as it takes up huge space. We live in the technological age where people would rather stay at home and read books on their devices than to travel to a library just to read. Because of
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, public libraries are getting obsolete and
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 it is considered not important. As an advocate of technology, the information stored in public libraries can still be safely uploaded online into a digital form turning the internet into an online library of knowledge and safe keeping.
On the other hand
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, people still think that it is important because libraries are accessible to anyone even to those who are not technologically oriented or lack the finances to procure a reading device like Kindle. According to a survey done by high school students of Ateneo de Iloilo, people who are living in rural areas are not educated with the usage of modern equipment
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 as a mobile phone and desktop computers,
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, rural people acquire information from reading newspapers and books in its physical form. To these people, public libraries
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 a necessity and ought to be preserved. In conclusion, people’s view
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 the importance of
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not private; open to or concerning the people as a whole
public
 libraries may
vary but
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vary, but
 in the modern world where everything will progress digitally, public libraries will not be as important as it used to be.
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