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Scientist agree that people are damaging their health by eating too much junk food. Some people think that the answer to this problem is to educate people. Others think education will not work. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Does eating unhealthy
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 damages people's health?
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 topic is always the centre of discussion. Some of them think that educating people in
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 context will help, while others have a view that it will bring not much of a difference.
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 essay will discuss both the views, I,
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, support the former view. On the one hand, the people advocating that making others aware of what they are eating will not work, as everyone is so busy and they don't have
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 to cook healthy meals.
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, there are more places that sell fast
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 in comparison of the healthy meal stall, so they have very limited choices.
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, most of the
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, junk meals
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taste
 better than
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the health
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. Because of all these reasons,
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 group of the people thinks that there will be no change in the way people make their
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 choices.
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, the people who believe that making the masses aware and educating them will bring about the huge difference.
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, most of them are not aware what they are eating, as most of the
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 they don't read the nutritional content mentioned in the product, so if they know the percentage of sodium, carbohydrates, fats in the products and how it will damage their health,
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 they will be more aware
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, educating the children in the school about healthy eating along side with the parents.
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, during the extracurricular activities the parents can be involved in school and grow fruits and vegetables along with their children and raise money by selling it. By
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 they will have a sense of accomplishment and will get to know more about growing healthy vegetables and fruits and eating healthy. To conclude, educating people about making a right
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 and eating healthy will definitely help the society as a whole.
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