Nowadays there is an increase in social problems involving young people because more parents spent time at work than with their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Adolescence is a
time
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period when physical, emotional, and
behavioral
of or relating to behavior
behavioural
changes occur. The adolescents due to these pubertal changes, suffers from
emotional behavioral
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emotional, behavioural
emotional behavioural
problems like
identity
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crises, low self-esteem, anxiety, somatic complaints and phobias. At
this
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stage the children
suffers
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suffer
from
identity
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crisis because of the double standards made by parents and society. I believe that parents’ lack of attention to their children due to the
time
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they spend at work is an influential reason for teenage social problems. The adolescent is a stage, which is very crucial to develop personality and
identity
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of the
child
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. As a
child
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reaches to
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stage of
life
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, he comes across with the sudden and rapid changes in body and mind, which cause emotional disturbance. The
child
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put
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puts
his efforts to come out from theses emotional disturbances but the parents have a great role to play. If an adolescent behaves like a
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child he
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child, he
is criticized by his parents as, do not behave like a
child
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, you are not a kid anymore.
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hand if
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hand, if
he behaves like an
adult he
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adult, he
is again criticized by them as, not take interest in adult’s stuff or do not interfere in decision making matters, go and play outside. These double standards confuse them to develop a proper
identity
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. Parents these days are quite busy outside and keep their children to either grandparents or to a baby-sitter.
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has a very negative consequence to a
child
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’s
psychology
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psychological
and the bond between the parents and children
thus
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becomes weak. These social
problem
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problems
faced by the
child
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are made by modern
life
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style as
media
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the media
played a vital role to make a so called
life
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standards and the youth
is
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are
mad to follow them. The parent-
child
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relationship now a day is totally a learned
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
- parents have adopted modernization to deal their children by giving them space and money but do not spend quality
time
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together, and the children
also
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want freedom from their parents, their role models, and inspiration, are determined by the media.
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However in
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However, in
the long run of modern
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life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
, it is a healthy competition among societies, but it can cause alarming destruction in future for teenager as they are totally being ignored by their parents. There is
need
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a need
to
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for
psycho-educate parents that how does quality of
time
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can control many
issue
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issues
in parent
child
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relationships.

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