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Many countries are experiencing population growth and need more homes.Some people think that new homes should be constructed in existing cities. Do you agree or disagree.

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With the increasing population, need of accommodating
large number
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a large number
 of people has been posing a major challenge worldwide. Some masses think that constructing new buildings in existing cities
is
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are
 a solution to
this
problem but
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problem, but
 I disagree with it and will give my viewpoint in
upcoming paragraphs
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the upcoming paragraphs
.
To begin
 with, most of the cities are already bustling and dense. If new apartments will be
constructed
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constructed, then
then
 it would lead to overcrowding in cities which will
further
 result in poor quality of life.
Moreover
, more housing means more consumption of natural resources which will eventually deplete with increased demand.
Furthermore
, housing more population in urban settings would pave the way to increased competition among
people which
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people, which
 will give birth to various issues
such
 as unemployment, poverty and increase in crime rates.
In addition
 to
this
, air pollution will elevate and may lead to poor air quality.
For example
, in
Deilhi
a city in north central India
Delhi
 air quality has
worsen
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worsened
 in few decades.
However
, the possible solution to
this
 emerging
problem
 is to encourage the town developers to construct the dwellings in
countryside
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the countryside
. It will not only improve the
problem
 of overcrowding in cities but will
also
 help in
development
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the development
 of rural communities by providing them more facilities and employment. In conclusion, there is a dire need to overcome the
problem
 of accommodating the increasing population as it will not only affect the living standards of people but will
also
 hinder the growth of
country
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the country
a country
.

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