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In the past when students did a university degree they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays they have morw opportunity to study abroad. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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since
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Since
 time immemorial, it has been common practice among students to visit
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 educational hubs in order to pursue
further
 studies
.
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.
 These days
,
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,
however
, witnessed
frequent trend
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the frequent trend
 of going abroad for studies which was almost negligible a century ago.
This
 comes along with numerous blessings and drawbacks, as
well which
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well, which
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will discuss in
next essay
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the next essay
. To commence with plus side, visiting abroad offer masses an opportunity of becoming familiar with international culture and
study
 system. What
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 mean to say is that one can easily adopt
new environment
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the new environment
 for
study
 and perhaps he/she can meet various cultural activities over there which will obviously
has
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have
positive influence
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a positive influence
 on
community
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the community
. Another advantage
is related
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relates
 to
scholarship which
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scholarship, which
 is given to international students by world bank only if they well exams.
Thirdly
, migrated student can get benefits from supreme
study
 structure and new methods of professors.
Since
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For
 every coin has two sides immigration of students
also
 contains multifarious
drawbacksn
the quality of being a hindrance
drawbacks
; homesickness is one of them. An international student may feel disturbed and stressed when he/she goes far away from home and may end up with
depressed mind State
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the depressed mind State
. Ultimately, learners in abroad are not provided with basic facilities and rights which has been seen in
Norway where
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Norway, where
 recently
indian
a member of the race of people living in America when Europeans arrived
Indian
 students faced several problems regarding accommodation and water supply. In conclusion, having mentioned above statements I believe that despite some serious drawbacks of
study
 abroad,
this
 tendency still more than a boon for
students especially
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students, especially
 for middle class students since they can flourish their future in an optimistic manner.

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