Thesedays, problems with pollution are becoming worse, particularly in large cities. What are the reasons for this and how can this be solved? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In today's

world

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world,

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the issue of air

pollution

has become a major

concerns

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concern

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to metropolitan

cities

. I personally believe, there are two main

reason

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that harm our

environemnt

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environment

overpopulation and

greenhouse

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the greenhouse

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effect.

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essay will discuss two problems and how to address them, using

relevant

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a relevant

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example

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from UK BBC

news

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and

Queenland

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Queensland

University to demonstrate points and prove arguments. Environmentalist experts throughout the

world

has

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advised that the

world

is overpopulation

in particular

main

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cities

aroung

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round

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with

low density

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growing

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problem

causes

that

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the majority of

citizen

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citizens

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choose

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to live in main metropolitan

areas

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lack

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of job opportunities development and resources in rural

areas

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empiral

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empirical

research by

Queenland

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Queensland

University suggested that

urban

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population has grown in importance over the

last

decade.

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due to

the fact health

public

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system,

facilites

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facilities

and infrastructure

has

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advanced technologies in comparison with rural

areas

. Consistent with

this

line of thinking,

government

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the government

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should allocate more public funds to rural

areas

with the aim of creating more opportunities for the local people and reducing the existing

problem

of air

pollution

in major

cities

. Another reason as

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the

problem

of contamination is the greenhouse effect. Major

cities

around the

world

started building powerful power

plant

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plants

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near

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residencial

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residential

areas

in order to meet the high demand

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electricity.

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lead

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to the process of

burn

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fossil

fuel

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fuels

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such

as coal, the

greast

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great

greatest

contaminated material.

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article published by BBC

news

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showed that 20% of the population in Taiwan has suffered lung cancer

as a result

of contaminated particulars on air generated from the power plant.

Thus

therefore

it is

not

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doubt that leaders

worlwide

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worldwide

should curb the emission rate by 20% in large

cities

To conclude

from the arguments and examples given I firmly believe that

goverments

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governments

government

worldwide should work together to combat the effect of climate

changes

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and

pollution

that it is causing detrimental damage to

dweler

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dweller

citizens. In the

futere

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future

, there will be more challenges to overcome, but individuals

sould

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should

could

combant

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combat

and defeat the

problem

of environmental

pollution

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Some people think that the best way to reduce the time spent in travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city center with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some believe that students should begin learning a language very early in school while others think these subjects should be taught later. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?